Alfie Chandler 38/60 A really good variety of shots have been included in this sequence. Font of the credits is appropriate and doesn’t distract from the action. Music has been used to good effect to enhance and build the atmosphere of the opening. The shot of the hands as they pass the paper to one another needs to be reshot as it is out of focus. The cut between George throwing the paper down and walking on through the woods is a little awkward because the movement of George flows from one cut to the next but the location is different. I am assuming you want the viewer to believe that he has been walking on for a while – perhaps you could cut back to George Coates looking back or looking on after GB and then cut to his continued journey? As GB continues on and starts looking nervously around, I feel you could do more with the sound to suggest why he is scared – maybe the cracking of twigs underfoot or the sound of breathing through the gasmask? There is also an issue with match on action when it cuts from GB looking around nervously and then walking backwards and pulling his phone out. In the first half of the shot he is walking forwards and it cuts to him moving backwards with no evidence of the turn on screen. When the GC’s phone rings and he turns it off, could you layer in some dialogue or him making an exasperated noise to suggest he’s annoyed with him? The change in music is great when we see the killer and the knife. The death scene is also effective with the sound of the knife. To make it even more horrific could you add sound for GB’s last gasps of breath (nothing over the top but something to add to the atmosphere)? As you have the title at the end of the sequence, could you add something afterwards to suggest this was a precursor to the main film (e.g. the gasmask in a moving box and someone yelling to ask where the box goes?)?
Alfie Chandler 15/20 Planning and research is complete with some detailed posts. There is proficient research into similar products with codes and conventions of film openings and horror sub-genres, an analysis of horror openings and research into horror openings. Research into a potential target market is lacking – there is some research into horror audiences and how films may appeal but not much audience feedback regarding own film. To improve – you could have more posts analysing who your film is for and how you have made attempts to appeal to this audience. There is proficient organisation of actors, locations and costumes – to improve you may want to draw comparisons to existing products (e.g. with locations, costumes and casting). You could also include behind the scenes/on set footage. There is excellent work on shotlists, drafting of scripts, storyboards, including commentary on changes made. Level of care in presentation in proficient/excellent with a variety of presentation techniques including Prezi, Powtoon, embedded YouTube videos, screen grabs and text. Time management has been excellent.
Alfie Chandler 38/60
ReplyDeleteA really good variety of shots have been included in this sequence. Font of the credits is appropriate and doesn’t distract from the action. Music has been used to good effect to enhance and build the atmosphere of the opening. The shot of the hands as they pass the paper to one another needs to be reshot as it is out of focus. The cut between George throwing the paper down and walking on through the woods is a little awkward because the movement of George flows from one cut to the next but the location is different. I am assuming you want the viewer to believe that he has been walking on for a while – perhaps you could cut back to George Coates looking back or looking on after GB and then cut to his continued journey? As GB continues on and starts looking nervously around, I feel you could do more with the sound to suggest why he is scared – maybe the cracking of twigs underfoot or the sound of breathing through the gasmask? There is also an issue with match on action when it cuts from GB looking around nervously and then walking backwards and pulling his phone out. In the first half of the shot he is walking forwards and it cuts to him moving backwards with no evidence of the turn on screen. When the GC’s phone rings and he turns it off, could you layer in some dialogue or him making an exasperated noise to suggest he’s annoyed with him? The change in music is great when we see the killer and the knife. The death scene is also effective with the sound of the knife. To make it even more horrific could you add sound for GB’s last gasps of breath (nothing over the top but something to add to the atmosphere)? As you have the title at the end of the sequence, could you add something afterwards to suggest this was a precursor to the main film (e.g. the gasmask in a moving box and someone yelling to ask where the box goes?)?
Alfie Chandler 15/20
ReplyDeletePlanning and research is complete with some detailed posts. There is proficient research into similar products with codes and conventions of film openings and horror sub-genres, an analysis of horror openings and research into horror openings. Research into a potential target market is lacking – there is some research into horror audiences and how films may appeal but not much audience feedback regarding own film. To improve – you could have more posts analysing who your film is for and how you have made attempts to appeal to this audience. There is proficient organisation of actors, locations and costumes – to improve you may want to draw comparisons to existing products (e.g. with locations, costumes and casting). You could also include behind the scenes/on set footage. There is excellent work on shotlists, drafting of scripts, storyboards, including commentary on changes made. Level of care in presentation in proficient/excellent with a variety of presentation techniques including Prezi, Powtoon, embedded YouTube videos, screen grabs and text. Time management has been excellent.